Thank you. There's nothing better than being internet deprived for a week -- oh, the joys of moving house -- and coming back to such a thoughtful, fantastic piece of feedback.
I will have to say, I don't see McKay/Zelenka, but I think you've done a great sales job.
McKay/Zelenka is one of those pairings that... hmmm. It's not that it *doesn't* work or *couldn't*, it's just that I tend to believe in the McKay/Sheppard and Zelenka/Weir more.
I was also confused about the gate explosion, but hey--it's not weirder than some of the things in canon--hello, zat guns? I'm also quite willing to suspend my admittedly miniscule scientific reason to go with the story, and it was fine, perfectly plausible.
*shrugs* I know. Since writing this, I've realised that canon's proved that the stargates don't actually react like that. On the other hand, I'm far too lazy to go back and rewrite this, so a suspension of disbelief is required.
I just imagine the janitor cleaning the lab, and seeing the laptop briefly appear and disappear--thinking he's gone insane.
Hee. That is a fantastic mental image.
Awesome story, really rich in sense memory, and I was so pleased that you used Radek's POV, a nice counterpoint to McKay, whom I love with a the fire of a thousand suns, but the tone really didn't fit the usual McKay bluster--it needed the calm sensibility of Radek.
This was the paragraph that really made me happy. I adore Radek, so knowing that other people could recognise him and understand why it had to be his story is a wonderful feeling.
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I will have to say, I don't see McKay/Zelenka, but I think you've done a great sales job.
McKay/Zelenka is one of those pairings that... hmmm. It's not that it *doesn't* work or *couldn't*, it's just that I tend to believe in the McKay/Sheppard and Zelenka/Weir more.
I was also confused about the gate explosion, but hey--it's not weirder than some of the things in canon--hello, zat guns? I'm also quite willing to suspend my admittedly miniscule scientific reason to go with the story, and it was fine, perfectly plausible.
*shrugs* I know. Since writing this, I've realised that canon's proved that the stargates don't actually react like that. On the other hand, I'm far too lazy to go back and rewrite this, so a suspension of disbelief is required.
I just imagine the janitor cleaning the lab, and seeing the laptop briefly appear and disappear--thinking he's gone insane.
Hee. That is a fantastic mental image.
Awesome story, really rich in sense memory, and I was so pleased that you used Radek's POV, a nice counterpoint to McKay, whom I love with a the fire of a thousand suns, but the tone really didn't fit the usual McKay bluster--it needed the calm sensibility of Radek.
This was the paragraph that really made me happy. I adore Radek, so knowing that other people could recognise him and understand why it had to be his story is a wonderful feeling.