Hmmmm... I made a couple changes to the third section, but mostly, it was just adding a comma or two to the first paragraph, and changing a two sentences.
1) his mind remained blank. He couldn’t think of the appropriate words, let alone the sentences he should use.
2) “She told me what happened. About your father. I’m so s - “ he said, but was cut off by Josh.
I'm working on the fourth section now (hopefully I can clean it up a little), so will it be okay if I email it to you? Within the hour, hopefully, but if not, tomorrow night (say, in about 18hours from now).
After that, Mum will be down, so I won't be spending as much time online anyway. *g*
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Date: 2003-10-22 07:06 am (UTC)Over here, it's midnight.
Hmmmm... I made a couple changes to the third section, but mostly, it was just adding a comma or two to the first paragraph, and changing a two sentences.
1) his mind remained blank. He couldn’t think of the appropriate words, let alone the sentences he should use.
2) “She told me what happened. About your father. I’m so s - “ he said, but was cut off by Josh.
I'm working on the fourth section now (hopefully I can clean it up a little), so will it be okay if I email it to you? Within the hour, hopefully, but if not, tomorrow night (say, in about 18hours from now).
After that, Mum will be down, so I won't be spending as much time online anyway. *g*