Yeah, my only concern is that so far, all of the flashbacks have been a description of what Dan's literally telling Abby. Hence, if Dan wouldn't tell Abby that... it shouldn't be there, I don't think.
Yeah. I've got Casey and Dan making out in the back of my head, all high-school-esque sexual desperation, and I'm not sure how to write it.
If you do it in a conversation, it'll just make us (or maybe just me) wanna see what actually happened.
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Date: 2004-10-26 07:25 am (UTC)Yeah, my only concern is that so far, all of the flashbacks have been a description of what Dan's literally telling Abby. Hence, if Dan wouldn't tell Abby that... it shouldn't be there, I don't think.
Yeah. I've got Casey and Dan making out in the back of my head, all high-school-esque sexual desperation, and I'm not sure how to write it.
If you do it in a conversation, it'll just make us (or maybe just me) wanna see what actually happened.
Actually, that's a really good point. Hmmm...