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In celebration of finally getting all my stories1 up on AO3, a writing meme last seen on [personal profile] resonant's DW:

Pick a paragraph (or any passage between ... let's say 200 and 600 words) from anything I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the characters' heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.



1 - That is a slight lie as the anime stuff I wrote at the not-so-mature ages of 16 and 17 isn't up there, but that's not getting posted online. They died a quiet death with Geocities and none will mourn their passing. But everything fannish written from 20y.o. onwards, is all sitting on AO3. It's a yay, peoples.

Date: 2011-02-11 03:06 am (UTC)
resonant: Ray Kowalski (Due South) (Default)
From: [personal profile] resonant
From "Let You Kiss Me." Mostly, of course, I want to know what happens next ...

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"How about..." John walks over to the sofa, sits on the vacant cushion. "Just ask me to stay."

"It's a very short-term answer," Sherlock says, turning towards John. "People stay as long as there is personal incentive for them. My expressed wish for you to stay would only influence your decisions until a more pressing emotional connection was formed with someone else."

"Maybe you should man up," John hears himself say. "Maybe you should be the one I form an emotional connection with."

There's a breathy huff of laughter and then Sherlock freezes, head turned to John. "That wasn't a joke," he announces slowly.

Sherlock looks surprised, like before his eyes a penguin just turned pink and started singing Ave Maria. John doesn't miss the quick glance Sherlock shoots down at the arm with the nicotine patch, the split-second he takes to remind himself he's clean.

"I'm serious."

"John, I'm not--" Sherlock starts, and then, "There are many reasons--" and finally, "That's completely irrational."

"You like me," John replies. "You think I'm the least annoying person in London."

"I said the least annoying person I'd met. I really can't speak for the entire Greater London area." Sherlock frowns and adds, "I simply meant that I endure your company more easily than anyone else's. It wasn't a vow of undying adoration."

"And yet, you're sitting here concocting schemes to make me stay," John says, high on the impossibility of it all. "Let's make this easy. I like you and I'd be fine with kissing you on a regular basis. So tell me you like me and you want me to stay, and then kiss me."

"I think you're oversimplifying matters," Sherlock says but he doesn't sound unhappy about it. More… cautious.

"You just like everything being so complex you're the only one who can figure it out," John replies easily. "Try it. Worst that happens, you can go back to your Machiavellian plots."

"Niccolo Machiavelli would approve of a slight amount of deception for the greater good of all, but that's not what most people mean when they say Machiavellian."

"You're stalling," John teases.

Sherlock looks as if he's not sure if he should smile or not, but he wants to. "I'm thinking."

"Any time now."

"I spend more time with you than I ever anticipated spending with a flatmate and despite all facts that should suggest otherwise, I find myself…" Sherlock takes a deep breath, shaking his head. Then he meets John's eyes, leans forward and says, "I like you. Stay," and kisses John softly.

That's the sixth time Sherlock kisses him. After that, John stops counting.

Date: 2011-02-11 04:15 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] harpijka
I'm not really into White Collar fandom, but I have a huge crush on your Mozzie (and your Elizabeth). This is the best fanfic in this fandom I've read.
I love the beginning:
Mozzie has no loyalty to the Suit. The Suit is the government. He stands for law, social control and all the things that Mozzie fundamentally opposes. Unlike Neal, he's not delusional enough to think that any of that changes just because Agent Burke breaks the rules occasionally.

So he's not here because of the Suit. He's here because he likes El. She's smart, she's stylish, she gets his jokes and she got him an invite to the opening night party of La Boheme. Her only obvious flaw is her choice of husband but Mozzie's willing to ignore that right now.

He scopes out the building one more time and then -- once he's sure the delivery van across the street is nothing but a delivery van -- he rings the bell.

El opens the door with a smile. "Did you get lost?"

"No," Mozzie says, peering over her shoulder to make sure the room behind her is empty. He was sure before he walked up the front steps, but it never hurts to double, triple and quadruple check.

She steps back, waving him in with five perfectly French manicured fingers. "You walked past our place three times."

"I was making sure it wasn't being watched."

"You don't think walking the same street three times would look a little suspicious?"

Mozzie shrugs. "Suspicion's hard to prove." He doesn't explain that he needed to be obvious. If Neal had been here, he would have sent some signal, would have found a way to get outside and try to spot whatever Mozzie was looking for. Neal wouldn't have been able to resist his curiosity. It's one of those things that make Neal who he is.

El watches him closely, like she knows there's more to his incompetent recon act, and then she closes the door. "You said we needed to talk."

Date: 2011-02-14 01:53 pm (UTC)
harpijka: sarcasm (Default)
From: [personal profile] harpijka
Thank you!
I LOVE your first line of this story - nice to know you like it too and how you interpret it; I always appreciate brilliant, concise beginnings: they usually mean the whole story is well written.
And I do like Mozzie and Elizabeth, and Peter more than Neal: maybe because we, as viewers, are so obviously supposed to like charming con men...

Date: 2011-02-16 09:29 pm (UTC)
ext_223290: (Default)
From: [identity profile] littleclodia.livejournal.com
ummm sorry
i mean sorry to invade
i'm from lj, don't have a dreamwidth, just an openid, but i love your sherlock stories so much and i love reading author's notes on their fics so i couldn't possibly pass this opportunity
i hope it's okay and you know... ahem...
anyway, since "let me kiss you" was already commented on, i think i could ask you about the whore of babylon... i really wish i could read you commentary on the WHOLE FIC, i mean, i know this is totally not happening, but oh god, i'd have read it. oh yes. i'm just. i find most of the dvd and etc. audio-commentary inexplicably boooooring, but i love reading author's comments/notes on their fanfiction, that's why i half-obsessedly read comments after stories and follow the interaction between readers and authors - it sometimes gives very lovely and unique glimpses into the story. anyway, i know, i can't ask for full commentary for the story, but i still can't choose between two episodes (please, don't hate me), they are the one in the freezer and the weekend in paris. i was wondering if you could maybe choose what you'd like to comment more and then i'd post the exact paragraph...

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