WW fic: The Right Word

[out_there]

You know, my knowledge of HTML is so pathetic that I tend to be proud of getting a very basic page working (even if I did use MSFrontPage to get it). Considering I passed computing systems (with C+ coding), I know it's just a case of effort. I'm just too lazy to work out how to do it.

Here is The Right Word which was vastly improved by both kaneko and oxoniensis. Thanks for pointing out things like internal logic, flow, and the phrases that Sam would have verbally bitch-slapped me for using.

ETA: You see the pretty pic at the top? That was my birthday present from oxoniensis! *bg*

Comments

[krazykitkat.livejournal.com]

I'll state at the outset that I'm more of a girlslash fan than boyslash.
I really liked this. Unlike some of the J/S around, this sounded and "looked" like them.
And I love Sam thinking about words and finding the right word. I particularly nodded at:
He remembered his certainty that the right word, the perfect word, was there, resting amongst the others. The right word would make the difference between an adequate sentence and an inspiring phrase, between mediocre writing and great prose.

And yes, Sam...sometimes it's impossible to find the right word.
Very nice and wordy.

[out-there.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much. I'm glad it felt like Sam and Josh to you. That's always a big compliment. *g*

And yes, Sam...sometimes it's impossible to find the right word.

But if he didn't keep looking for it, he wouldn't be Sam. *g*

"there's like a six foot painting on the wall of teddy roosevelt."

[tangleofthorns.livejournal.com]

I always like fiction that dwells on the show's writer characters as writers (which explains a lot of my thing for Toby)--this is quite pretty and touching. Good job!

Re: "there's like a six foot painting on the wall of teddy roosevelt."

[out-there.livejournal.com]

Thanks! *g*

One of the things that really amused me was the bad grammar/dodgy phrases that my beta's picked up on. (Let's just say that I was one step off "highly unique"... *g*)

Personaly, I'm a little intimidated of writing Sam for this reason. He's a better writer than I am, and I hate the idea of writing a fic that's filled with mistakes that Sam wouldn't make. (Toby, I wouldn't even attempt. At least Sam has similar flaws to me, too much imagery and description, too little punctuation and grammatically correct sentences... *g*)

[oxoniensis.livejournal.com]

I'm going to go and read the finished version in a minute, but just to say, I think I'd better do a bit more work on the cover. All the text across Sam's face, and the background text has blured on uploading. I'll see if I can redo it, and make it clearer. No guarentees, as I'm a beginner at this, but I'll do my best.

[out-there.livejournal.com]

Feel free. (I need to fix up the file anyway - tiny tense typo I spotted last night. Serves me right for changing it after it was beta'd... *g*)

[out-there.livejournal.com]

Although, looking at it from the work PC, I can see what you mean. At home, it loads very well (and looks great! *g*)...

Maybe it's a monitor thing.

[oxoniensis.livejournal.com]

At home, it loads very well

Oh good! It may just be my browser then. But as it's dodgy on your work PC too, I think I'd still better try to sharpen it up. It might not be until the weekend though - I've a busy week ahead.

[ann-tara.livejournal.com]

I'm a week late with the kudos for this piece of J/S fic because ezust turned me onto it last week and I didn't make the connection until today in talking to her that it was yours. Obviously I need to go ahead update my friends list so I don't miss the important stuff from now on. ;)

Anyway, there's not a lot of J/S that still hits my buttons, but The Right Word did it for me. It was so very Sam - and even Josh sold me. Good job! :)

[out-there.livejournal.com]

You know, every time I see your icon my mind just switches off for a few seconds... Mmmm...

Anyway, there's not a lot of J/S that still hits my buttons, but The Right Word did it for me. It was so very Sam - and even Josh sold me. Good job! :)

Woohoo! *does the happy writer dance of positive feedback*

I'm glad they both worked for you. I'm such a Sam gal and I was more than a little intimidated by trying to work from inside his head, so it's great that it did work.

[constance-b.livejournal.com]

I've been reading through the West Wing recs on Crack_Van. Is this posted somewhere else? I can't find a link for it that isn't dead and I'd like to read.